I am a student at Ōtaki College in Ōtaki, NZ. My blog is a place where I will be able to share some of my learning. Please note....some work won't be edited - they are just my first drafts, so there may be some errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas on my posts.
You’ve done an amazing job on your profile page about Christopher Columbus. You’ve included a lot of amazing facts and I particularly like how you’ve interspersed them with pictures. I also really like how you’ve used blues and greens in your background. It makes it look like the waters Columbus sailed across!
Quick tip: maybe you could move the pictures to the side so the text isn’t split in the middle. It could make it easier for your readers to interpret.
Have you ever been sailing? If so where to?
Do you want to travel and explore when you are older?
Thank you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comments. Positive - something done well Thoughtful - a sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Kia Ora Ramari,
ReplyDeleteYou’ve done an amazing job on your profile page about Christopher Columbus. You’ve included a lot of amazing facts and I particularly like how you’ve interspersed them with pictures. I also really like how you’ve used blues and greens in your background. It makes it look like the waters Columbus sailed across!
Quick tip: maybe you could move the pictures to the side so the text isn’t split in the middle. It could make it easier for your readers to interpret.
Have you ever been sailing? If so where to?
Do you want to travel and explore when you are older?
Hei konā mai,
Shannon