Once there was a woman named Sofia who found out that she was pregnant. The father (named Tom) was so excited that he would see his child, but sadly he couldn’t. He had to go overseas to find a better island, a better place for his wife, his child and his village to live. So one day he left with his wife and child left on the island. 1 year passed by and the child (named Marilyn) was born and yet the father hasn’t return, Sofia was worried sick when he had not return, but she would not let that get to her. She had to stay positive for her child.
When Marilyn was 3 years old she already learnt how to walk and to talk. One day Marilyn and her mother was outside playing, then the one of the horn’s went. The horn meant there is something or someone coming, but if it’s someone they knew then that’s fine but it wasn’t. They had guns and other weapons, so everyone in the village had to evacuate but mostly Sofia and Marilyn. So Sofia grabbed Marilyn and ran off to keep her safe and two of the helpers were right behind her.
They all went on a boat to get passed the river that was just ahead but right behind them were the intruders. They don’t know if they could get passed the river in time, who knows if they could, without getting hurt. One of the men shot a bullet, would it miss them?
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You have a really good story. I liked the start of the story and I hope you can continue it. I think that you use a bit too many brackets. How you ended your first paragraph was really cool. "She had to stay positive for her child" was really good. Thumbs up.
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